The opening is so strong. I love the imagery of "drenched in sunlight" and "shimmered in the humidity". I see it, I feel it, and I'm there. Beautiful prose.
It's all about using the words to combine different descriptors. Saying the sunlight was shining on them would be very one-dimensional.
Saying they're 'drenched in sunlight' adds sunlight to the idea of being soaked in water. It's a two-dimensional description and therefore far more engaging. I hope this makes sense.
The opening is so strong. I love the imagery of "drenched in sunlight" and "shimmered in the humidity". I see it, I feel it, and I'm there. Beautiful prose.
Thank you!
It's all about using the words to combine different descriptors. Saying the sunlight was shining on them would be very one-dimensional.
Saying they're 'drenched in sunlight' adds sunlight to the idea of being soaked in water. It's a two-dimensional description and therefore far more engaging. I hope this makes sense.